email format

Hello,

not sure if thats the right forum, but anyway. I just wondered which format you think would look better. We send invoices by email to our customers with payment methods, etc. The first format has more space between lines the second is more compact. Which one do you think is better?

First format:
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PAYMENT METHODS:

- PayPal & Nochex in GB Pound Sterling to ..

- Cheque, Money Order, Bank Draft & Cash in GB Pound Sterling.
If paying by Cheque in GBP, please allow 7 days for delivery.

- Cheque, Money Order, Bank Draft & Cash in USD at GBP1 to USD2.10.
If paying by cheque in USD, please allow 14 days for delivery.

Second format:
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PAYMENT METHODS:
- PayPal & Nochex in GB Pound Sterling to ..
- Cheque, Money Order, Bank Draft & Cash in GB Pound Sterling.
If paying by Cheque in GBP, please allow 7 days for delivery.
- Cheque, Money Order, Bank Draft & Cash in USD at GBP1 to
USD2.10. If paying by cheque in USD, please allow 14 days for delivery.


Also what do you think of the line "We look forward to receiving your payment"? Do you think that sounds ok?

I like the first format better. It's broken up more so that you can distinguish the individual methods of payment. The second method runs together too much.

As for your second question, I'd leave that out. It's really obvious that you're looking forward to payment - that's why you're in business in the first place. I'd use something more along the lines of "We at (company name) thank you for your business."